Hitch It / Ditch It: Walking on Broken Glass, Sex and Monsters, The Specialists
Hitch it / Ditch it…
Hitch it: Cool, breezy “Buffy the Vampire Slayer”-writing paired with legible, clean, confident visuals. I’d like to see the dialogue a little more polished. At times it lapses into action-movie idioms (like “let’s dance“). But overall, the plot is nicely paced, and presented well.
Also: check out how Caitlyn composes scenes — adjusting camera angle and distance, refining gestures — even little things like the way a character tilts her head convey tones of visual storytelling.
Ditch It: Web Design. Too much wasted space at the top of the site, and the background pattern is so strong that it tends to overpower the delicate, gray ink-wash look of the visuals.
Hitch it: Color choices. In my opinion, the colors that Will is choosing do a good job of harmonizing throughout each strip.
Ditch It: Combining colored-lines with black lines. This happening in the comic quite often. It’s particularly jarring in the first panel of the strip above. The man on the left is outlined by black lines and the woman is outlined by a light brown. Yet they’re both in the foreground. I think the visuals of this strip would hand together a lot better if the lines were all either black or color.
Hitch it: Effective site design, great reader-outreach, and attractive visuals in the comic itself.
Ditch It: Lack of editing. There are a lot of pages in this comic that are ponderous to read. For example…
That could be an effective scene if the writing didn’t drag so much. Removing about a quarter of the text in a page like this — and compensating with things like better word-choices and allowing the visuals to do some of the storytelling — and you’ve got a gripping scene.
Also: A quick word on anatomy. Al is placing the waistline far too low on his bodies, and his people look awkward as a result. Take a look at the last panel above, and you’ll see a great example. I’d also encourage him to add some bend and curve to his figures. Everyone seems to stand straight as a board — with ruler-straight legs and no curve along the body whatsoever. That makes for some very unnatural scenes.