“On The Spot” Hot Seat Critique: Three Feet Under
This critique series is called the “On The Spot” Hot Seat. I will visit participants’ sites on a random day and talk about how their comic/site/social media is on that day. No archive-diving and no overview. The point is to try to reinforce the importance of making every update significant.
For those of you who are interested in the craft of comics and cartooning, this is your opportunity to talk about the subject in a Real World setting — “workshopping” one another’s comics, if you will.
But that’s only the beginning of the discussion.
Members (especially members who have asked for critiques in the past or plan on doing so in the future) are encouraged to add their own thoughtful responses.
The point isn’t to elect a new King of Comics (or point out a goat) — rather, this is a chance to talk about the how and why of what it is we do.
These are the only two participants who have signed up for this Hot Seat. I’ll leave the Open Call up for a while longer, and if no one else is interested, we can move on to another Hot Seat series.
The comic on the day I visited:
I’d like to see some more inside border in those word balloons. The lettering is getting awfully close to the lines of the balloons.
And Panel Three shows an awful lack of planning. When I see a panel like the Panel Three, my reaction is usually: “You’ve only got one figure in the panel and you couldn’t compose a scene that didn’t cover up part of the character’s head?!”
The punchline? For me, it fell flat. I guess there’s a little “surprise value” from the swearing, but, aside from that, it’s a pretty accurate summation of the set-up. It doesn’t offer a surprise or even a new way of looking at it. It’s… a very dull way of stating exactly what is going on.
And it would have been so easy to push.
The one thing it has going for it is personifying “creativity” and then characterizing Creativity as finicky.
I’d like to see that concept pushed into a Funny place. An entity — “Creativity” — is finicky.
How do you describe him/her as such… in a clever, surprising, unexpected way?
I’ll bet if you follow that path, you get somewhere funny.
Better yet, what this comic describes is a dysfunctional relationship. How would you use those kinds of terms/concepts to describe that relationship?